Friday Fictioneers: The House


PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

There was a house a block from ours, a house our parents specifically told us to avoid. “Bad things happen when someone crosses onto the property,” mother would say but I was rebellious.

One night I sneaked out, tip-toeing along the wrought-iron gate but just as I was about to step through the hole in the gate, a voice hissed behind me. “What are you doing? You’re going to get caught.” It was my annoying little brother. I waved him off and stepped through anyway.

As my right foot landed on the other side of the gate, I felt something…

(100 words)

Sorry about the ending. I know some of you readers hate it but I didn’t have a choice, I ran out of words. So if you must know, it was a spell breaking and that’s very bad considering what was let out or who. You can come out with that one on your own. Think supernaturally!!!

Each week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple hosts Friday Fictioneers where we’re challenged to write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words, more or less, based on the picture above.

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31 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: The House

  1. A possible edit,, leaving you with 12 more words

    There was a house a block from ours, a house Mom insisted we avoid. “Bad things happen when someone enters the property,” mother would say but I was rebellious.
    One night I sneaked out but just as I was about to step through the hole in the wrought iron gate, a voice hissed behind me. “You’re going to get caught.” It was my annoying little brother. I waved him off and stepped through anyway.
    As my right foot landed on the other side of the gate, I felt

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    • I’m glad to hear that. Some of my readers have had problems in the past. So I just wanted to put a note in there and then they won’t be caught by surprise.

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  2. Like Magaly, I have no problem with you leaving us hanging…
    (by the way, there is an excess ‘d’ hanging around after parents’ … surely the key up and jumped to your finger!)

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  3. My advice is to ignore all the advice you get and write the story in your own way.
    It works fine with the open ending, something I use often.
    Anyone with imagination will enjoy it, anyone who asks ‘What happened next?’ you can ignore.
    Keep doing this challenge, your writing will get tighter.
    And keep ignoring all advice!

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