Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: The Betrayal


wpid-photo-20151012091702621“Are you excited for our honeymoon?” Michael moaned while wrapping his arms just below Emily’s breasts and kissing her neck.

“Of course,” Emily said looking out to the ocean.

“Last call to board,” the porter yelled below.

Emily quietly sighed, “We’ll have a lovely time, right?”

Michael took Emily’s hand and intertwined his fingers with hers. “Absolutely.”

That night, as the boat glided smoothly on the water, Emily stood on the top deck, enjoying the warm breeze blow across her face. As her right hand played with her wedding band, a voice appeared behind her. “Was it worth it?”

She turned and saw Michael point a gun at her. “Michael? What are you doing?”

Michael gritted his teeth, “Was it worth it!” His voice and hands were trembling.

“What are you talking about?!”

“You betrayed me.” He pointed at her stomach. “That is not mine, is it?”

“Michael, you don’t understand, I…” Before she could finish, a bang went off. “Michael,” she gasped tearfully as another bang went off, sending her tumbling backwards over the railings.

(~175 Words)

I am participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above.

19 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: The Betrayal

  1. Michael doesn’t mess around does he? You betrayed me, POW, you’re dead! Great story Yinglan. I would like to have heard what Emily had to say. Sure was a surprise ending! I wanted to bring your attention to the 6th paragraph. I believe that should read, “That night as the boat glided smoothly on the water, Emily stood on the top deck “enjoying the warm wind blowing” across her face. If you would prefer that I don’t make corrections to your story, please let me know, and I will stop. Great story!! Thank you for your participation. 🙂

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    • I believe she was enjoying a lot of things beside the wind.
      I think Michael was just impatient. If he was patient, he would had listened to her explanation. I’m not sure what Emily was going to say but she was definitely pregnant with another man’s child.
      Thanks for the inspiring image, by the way, I saw it and a dozen different plots popped into my head and I chose this one.

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