Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Brothers


wpid-photo-20150529115224049Continued from last week’s story

Her grandmother walked to the table in the corner. On which was a large wooden bowl of what looked like ashes with incense sticking up. Her grandmother picked a fresh incense from the jar beside the bowl and placed it between her palms. She stared at it as Sharise watched with excitement. Within seconds, the tip of the incense glowed red.

Slowly, her grandmother bowed eight times, Sharise counted, before gently sticking the incense into the bowl. “Who are they?” Sharise asked a short while later. She was looking at the picture pinned on the wall. It was a picture of eight boys, all looked similar as if they were related.

“Your brothers,” Her grandmother answered.

“My what?”Β Sharise shrieked. Clearly, she didn’t know about her other siblings.

Her grandmother sighed. “Your mother has a nasty habit of sacrificing her children for their powers. That was what she was doing to you and Sasha.” Her grandmother led her to the mats in the center of the room. “Come, sit, and let me tell you a story.”

In case you don’t get the real picture

(~175 Words)

To be Continued…

I am participating in Priceless Joy’s flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above.Β 

In case you’ve missed the previous parts of this serial tale, you can read it by clicking each of the links below:

Part 1: Punishment for Defiance
Part 2: From Ocean to Park
Part 3: Gazebo Surprise
Part 4: Discovery

36 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Brothers

    • Thank you, I tried to make it stand alone so people wouldn’t have to read all the parts to catch up, only if they’re curious.

      Yeah, it’s sure a shock to find out she has eight other siblings she doesn’t know about. We must learn more about the mother but from this point, I’d say it looks like the mother is the villain in this story. Thank you for reading. πŸ™‚

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  1. I like the way you have moved the story along this week. For Sharise to be told about her mother’s true nature would have come as a huge shock. I liked the way you made use of the prompt, too. To have the boys as her brothers was a great idea.

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    • Thank you. To be honest, I was having a little trouble coming up with the continuation this week because I thought what can I do with eight boys and it hit me. Why not make them her brothers? The boys looked similar enough to be. πŸ™‚ I’m looking forward to write about the mother’s story next week. Thank you for reading.

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  2. omg! what a fantastic continuation from last week. I love this one especially…to see the evil and the goodness even more unfolding. I agree with others – this could stand alone but…the whole series is coming together so nicely. I can see these pieces as a loose collection of somewhat connected fiction.
    The grandmother seems just fabulously magical to me. You’ve done a good job with her character.
    Ellespeth

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  3. I wanted to stop by and just let you know how much I appreciate you for continuing to participate in this challenge. I love reading your stories and I know that others do too. You have become such a wonderful fiction writer! Thank you Yinglan! I appreciate your friendship and loyalty.

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